I put this advanced student sample answer to the IELTS writing task 2 through our English Grammar Profiler looking for stand out features. Here are the highest grammar constructions, that we have listed as C1:
- It is argued that volunteering should be made a part of the school curriculum. (This is the topic sentence)
- What you have done outside the classroom is often the thing that differentiates you from everyone else and gets you that coveted spot. (This is an explanation before the conclusion)
This is the full sample with more grammar:
It is argued that volunteering should be made a part of the school curriculum.
This essay agrees with that suggestion completely because it helps pupils develop soft skills and helps them gain much-needed work experience. Education should not be limited strictly to academic pursuits and those in education should also develop life skills, such as teamwork, empathy and self-discipline, and one of the best ways to hone these aptitudes is through community service. Serving those less fortunate than ourselves teaches us many lessons including how to work with people from other backgrounds and the value of hard work, thus enabling us to hone these skills before becoming an adult.
For example, many young people from wealthier countries take a gap year and help those less fortunate than themselves to increase their gratitude for what they have and improve their work ethic.
Many colleges and companies are also increasingly looking for this type of experience.
Most school leavers have the same grades and charitable works can help set you apart from other students when making college applications.
For example, Cambridge and Oxford receive thousands of applications from straight-A students every year and can only accept a small percentage of applicants.
What you have done outside the classroom is often the thing that differentiates you from everyone else and gets you that coveted spot. In conclusion, teenagers should be made to partake in unpaid work as part of their schooling because it will help them learn things they wouldn’t ordinarily learn from their teachers and it will also boost their chances of getting into third-level education.